tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post7624835546002162875..comments2023-08-17T04:03:48.173-04:00Comments on leftbrainwrite: Winter and AllLindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-81437545347473113192010-01-26T22:52:11.399-05:002010-01-26T22:52:11.399-05:00"the lace of frost traces maple veins" O..."the lace of frost traces maple veins" Ooh crisp, poignant and heady, like very good, very smooth wine.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-45242955702357501312010-01-25T20:39:18.828-05:002010-01-25T20:39:18.828-05:00Thank you all for reading... yes, the sodden gray ...Thank you all for reading... yes, the sodden gray sky perfect for the UK and Seattle... Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-46919336716744471432010-01-25T12:53:36.621-05:002010-01-25T12:53:36.621-05:00grey sodden sky flirting with the sun - ah, like t...grey sodden sky flirting with the sun - ah, like the weather in Britain (the sun usually snubs the poor sky)<br /><br />I liked the fickle breath that tumbles the leavesmazzz in Leedshttp://mazzz-in-leeds.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-82519981579058115832010-01-25T09:43:27.893-05:002010-01-25T09:43:27.893-05:00'Sodden sky'... I grok this one. Up here i...'Sodden sky'... I grok this one. Up here in the Pacific North West, aka Pacific North Wet, we have grayness and precipitation in altogether too many forms. A very evocative turn of phrase, and well played to boot.trevhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10930957143736509429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-32269534671059710012010-01-25T05:13:10.958-05:002010-01-25T05:13:10.958-05:00Linda I liked the last stanza the best too. Open t...Linda I liked the last stanza the best too. Open to many interpretations, but all of them suiting the mood of this piece. Just a word on the picture - its placement made it a little hard for me to read the poem - I wasn't sure whether the line breaks were deliberate or forced by the image. Maybe you could centre it above the text next time - and I hope there is a next time too :)Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-12834467871984222852010-01-24T22:01:16.181-05:002010-01-24T22:01:16.181-05:00I loved it - just beautifulI loved it - just beautifulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-386853289125791282010-01-24T07:49:49.256-05:002010-01-24T07:49:49.256-05:00Thank you all for reading! David, look forward to ...Thank you all for reading! David, look forward to your poem -- most of all, have fun with it! Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-46451294500412449912010-01-24T07:49:49.022-05:002010-01-24T07:49:49.022-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-42087631799181096762010-01-23T19:19:07.601-05:002010-01-23T19:19:07.601-05:00Beautiful, but also more than a bit creepy. I wond...Beautiful, but also more than a bit creepy. I wonder what walks the halls at night?Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-43870967259755665602010-01-23T17:09:11.446-05:002010-01-23T17:09:11.446-05:00Good poem. Wintry. Evokes melancholy feelings comm...Good poem. Wintry. Evokes melancholy feelings common in Winter too.Barry J. Northernhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12078136594892291058noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-43001944226465854712010-01-23T14:25:43.057-05:002010-01-23T14:25:43.057-05:00I love the poetics of ruin and decay. Wonderful st...I love the poetics of ruin and decay. Wonderful stuff<br /><br />marc nashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-41082049986916425352010-01-23T08:13:37.917-05:002010-01-23T08:13:37.917-05:00There is nothing more haunting than on old mental ...There is nothing more haunting than on old mental hospital, especially an abandoned one. You did that justice with your poem.Louhttp://theblockhouse.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-76909214737548970872010-01-22T18:07:56.606-05:002010-01-22T18:07:56.606-05:00That's cool Linda (yeah, I know, bad pun). I l...That's cool Linda (yeah, I know, bad pun). I like the last stanza best.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-83486970215288015322010-01-22T17:54:24.466-05:002010-01-22T17:54:24.466-05:00Gorgeous :) I envy your poetry skill. Did you real...Gorgeous :) I envy your poetry skill. Did you really write that over lunch? It's really, really beautiful.Chryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08888604641107836723noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-83745721479074832142010-01-22T16:58:27.806-05:002010-01-22T16:58:27.806-05:00Lovely poem. I challenged myself to write a poem, ...Lovely poem. I challenged myself to write a poem, and this one inspires me to give it my best.<br /><br />Thanks!<br />-David G ShrockAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10076907555584959149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-71767070836996403462010-01-22T16:41:27.626-05:002010-01-22T16:41:27.626-05:00I'm not the least bit surprised at the beautif...I'm not the least bit surprised at the beautiful justice you've done here Linda. Lovely, lovely prose.<br />This reminds me of an old abandoned mental institution we passed on the way back from vacation on the Gulf, (it was in Florida, but for the life of me I can't remember the name now - it's on an index card somewhere). :) It was a beautiful building, but obviously haunted. Even the hair on my hubby's arms stood up, and he's a big skeptic. <br />Thanks so much for sharing this, and I'm so glad you found a way to help the relief efforts in Haiti.Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-16326567405296719682010-01-22T16:30:57.815-05:002010-01-22T16:30:57.815-05:00Nice Linda. I think your profession has made you a...Nice Linda. I think your profession has made you a bit over mental. haha and hoho<br /><br />Again that was a nice poem... Paigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04702664099837224184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-47229702926041864892010-01-22T16:08:21.085-05:002010-01-22T16:08:21.085-05:00I was just today trying to think of the perfect wo...I was just today trying to think of the perfect words for this winter sky and you nailed it with "gush of grey sodden sky". I, too, am fascinated by old run down places and have recently become obsessed with the run down hotels in Cape Cod. No idea why. But, some things just speak to our soul. I believe in this case, you've spoken for winter's soul! Lovely.shannon espositohttp://murderinparadise.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-49985153665384333402010-01-22T15:46:01.522-05:002010-01-22T15:46:01.522-05:00Very nice, Linda - peaceful, calm, well done!Very nice, Linda - peaceful, calm, well done!PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-40952179054862502692010-01-22T15:34:28.963-05:002010-01-22T15:34:28.963-05:00The postcard is gorgeous and your words fit the mo...The postcard is gorgeous and your words fit the mood so well. I think you've done what you set out to do. Thank you for sharing. ~ OliviaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-40806986222593421172010-01-22T15:31:08.216-05:002010-01-22T15:31:08.216-05:00I did go over to read the poem that inspired you a...I did go over to read the poem that inspired you and think that yours successfully emulated mood and style.<br /><br />Yes, winter's melancholy is depicted quite well here in your lovely lines.<br /><br />In Williams' poem the coming Spring shows objects defined, a leaf made clear.<br /><br />In your Winter, objects are lessened, a shadow of a leaf.<br /><br />Wonderful.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-54097285008195996332010-01-22T15:26:47.836-05:002010-01-22T15:26:47.836-05:00Beautiful writing, Linda. Crisp frosty walks are m...Beautiful writing, Linda. Crisp frosty walks are my favourite. This one sounds especially lovely.<br />~Simon.Skycyclerhttp://skycycler.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-29612988187125242702010-01-22T12:17:19.607-05:002010-01-22T12:17:19.607-05:00So happy to see a poem here for #fridayflash. I...So happy to see a poem here for #fridayflash. I've been wanting to start writing poetry again, but haven't had the time when I'm doing short stories and vispo, too! <br /><br />The poem is poignant. It's amazing to me how the poem leads towards a realization of a type of death not necessarily followed by life--appropriate in my opinion with the subject matter here. The parallel of the gray SODDEN sky (flirting with the sun) with the end "burrowing into the whitening earth" is awesome. <br /><br />Loved these lines: "As one nature reduces –/<br />It lessens: obscurity, shadows of leaf." This poem stands nicely by itself, but I could also see it as the start of something larger...Maybe?? :)Melissahttp://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-12239278206314417992010-01-22T11:40:54.494-05:002010-01-22T11:40:54.494-05:00Thank you for reading. John, much of the campus is...Thank you for reading. John, much of the campus is razed, like so many of our old asylums. No pics from me, but it is a haunting place. <br /><br />Yes, Laurita, I love abandoned buildings, especially barns and, well, hospitals. <br /><br />Deborah, wordier than I like, but I was playing off of a poem by William Carlos Williams, using that as a prompt of sort. I've added a link...<br /><br />Just another experiment, not so successful perhaps... Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-5117189646606110942010-01-22T07:39:04.444-05:002010-01-22T07:39:04.444-05:00This piece left me sad, but hopeful as I guess it ...This piece left me sad, but hopeful as I guess it should. A few more words than I'm used to seeing in your tight(in a good way)poetry. I like it, but feel if you dig deeper, it can be even more powerful. Still, looking for a book of poetry from you. :)<br />Docs without Borders-wonderful gesture. Thanks.Misty Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10900414309618213580noreply@blogger.com