tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post1748204919102668998..comments2023-08-17T04:03:48.173-04:00Comments on leftbrainwrite: Blue HydrangeaLindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-58087460910498751582010-01-06T07:51:23.173-05:002010-01-06T07:51:23.173-05:00I love these pieces of Pure. I cannot wait to rea...I love these pieces of Pure. I cannot wait to read it in its entirety. Good luck with the reconstruction.<br /><br />My favourite line this time:<br />Shivering in the bitter air felt cleansing, like penance.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-34136254843094705152010-01-05T16:20:24.295-05:002010-01-05T16:20:24.295-05:00Vivid, clear and at times hard language. "I b...Vivid, clear and at times hard language. "I blamed the antipsychotic for my reluctant apathy. A small price for a functional life." - There must be something else going on, and I look forward to learning more.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-87509240310770873922010-01-04T21:18:28.366-05:002010-01-04T21:18:28.366-05:00New to your blog; so, G'day.
I thought, "...New to your blog; so, G'day.<br /><br />I thought, "the soft slaps of car doors echoed" was very clear and fresh. I knew exactly what it was, and it's new (to me, anyway).<br /><br />On the other hand, "eyes narrowed" is almost a cliche.<br /><br />I especially like the anticipation of finding out about the old man. I hope that PURE tells us more about him.Bernardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13194421719317300410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-44511533708720137092010-01-03T22:06:22.732-05:002010-01-03T22:06:22.732-05:00Outstanding writing here, Linda. You are so skille...Outstanding writing here, Linda. You are so skilled with phrasing and characterization. <br /><br />I loved this passage:<br />'Blessed are the pure in heart, for they shall see God.<br /><br />Right. Then my namesake sure wasn’t shaking hands with Peter at the pearly gate.'<br /><br />Spoke volumes about Ben's relationship with his father, whom we have not even met. That's wonderful.<br /><br />Happy New Year and here's to a 2010 publication (or at least a contract!).<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-78049628295420177352010-01-03T13:44:56.363-05:002010-01-03T13:44:56.363-05:00Fantastic and emotionally charged, which is quite ...Fantastic and emotionally charged, which is quite an accomplishment considering you're writing (in part) about an absence of emotion. Love your writing, and can't wait for the story to unfold.Louhttp://theblockhouse.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-70100260297916774532010-01-03T13:44:33.337-05:002010-01-03T13:44:33.337-05:00Your writing is masterful, brilliant. This line s...Your writing is masterful, brilliant. This line stood out to me-<br /> "she’d been dead to me for so long the burial felt parenthetical, an unread epilogue."<br /><br />Just loved the whole thing and I'm sure the novel will be fantastic.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-22887399481092054602010-01-03T09:37:19.397-05:002010-01-03T09:37:19.397-05:00Hello Linda,
I felt a little distant from this pi...Hello Linda,<br /><br />I felt a little distant from this piece to begin with, simply as I wasn't sure whereabouts in the book this extract came from, or what sort of book it is. Are we at the start here, or has this followed from previous events? It seemed like a dark romance novel from your description.<br /><br />That aside, I thought it worked very well. Your writing is sparse and evocative, and poetic when it matters most. I had no problem getting to grips with the characters or situation, and the 'anti-psychotic' influence was there without being told. I loved the use of 'summers impossibly distant', which said so much about his yearning for simpler times. He sounds like a man with an interesting (and disturbing -- love the mice!) history...<br /><br />I look forward to finding out more.<br /><br />Rich.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-38746494860812294622010-01-03T07:29:45.492-05:002010-01-03T07:29:45.492-05:00Look forward to seeing more snippets
Good stuffLook forward to seeing more snippets<br /><br />Good stuffChancehttp://thedeadadventurersclub.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-29694673059188214812010-01-03T02:06:57.412-05:002010-01-03T02:06:57.412-05:00That was great Linda, shut a moving piece.
Is the...That was great Linda, shut a moving piece. <br />Is the line 'Believe me, I wanted I could mourn my mother' meant to read 'Believe me , if I wanted'?<br />I want to know who the stranger is - when do we find out?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-62734210676283610122010-01-02T21:13:19.495-05:002010-01-02T21:13:19.495-05:00Thank you all for reading! Yes, who IS that man dr...Thank you all for reading! Yes, who IS that man dropping hydrangeas into holes... hmmm...<br /><br />I would love for all of you to read the entire book, but no one more than I - still a lot of writing and rewriting before 'The End'.<br /><br />Tony, I was super-pleased you sensed the meds blunting his emotion -- that was my intent, and it is SOOOOOO hard to write a voice numbed by drugs or addled by disease. <br /><br />Liane... smile...<br /><br />And Melinda, thank you so much for reading my words! Melinda is an artist (in so many ways) and her Three Crows print sits by my laptop spurring me on. <br /><br />Carrie, the tedium associated with the business of dying is one of my favorite lines... and so true.<br /><br />Thank you, and peace... LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-45993120004050947962010-01-02T20:16:39.424-05:002010-01-02T20:16:39.424-05:00Linda, I loved this flash piece of yours. You hoo...Linda, I loved this flash piece of yours. You hooked me right into it and even if I tried, I wouldn't have been able to shake loose. And I didn't want to. A great story.<br /><br />SalSalvatore Buttacihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17477098872186908154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-68328582744464911992010-01-02T18:55:40.686-05:002010-01-02T18:55:40.686-05:00I can't wait to read more...or should I just w...I can't wait to read more...or should I just wait for the book to come out? You captured the gravesite experience totally...the awkwardness of saying --or not saying something. I want more.Melinda Byrdhttp://www.byrdcallstudio.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-73319067933708176642010-01-02T16:58:56.632-05:002010-01-02T16:58:56.632-05:00I too will be buying this book Linda. As always, y...I too will be buying this book Linda. As always, your prose is beautiful. I've a feeling I know who the mysterious man is too, though it didnt' hit me until the end. Great work!Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-57929098328096301152010-01-02T13:43:19.387-05:002010-01-02T13:43:19.387-05:00Lovely prose as usual, Linda
"the burial felt...Lovely prose as usual, Linda<br />"the burial felt parenthetical, an unread epilogue" -> this was absolutely wonderful.mazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-9206406989343946882010-01-02T09:01:35.357-05:002010-01-02T09:01:35.357-05:00Linda, very sad, not to be able to find any emotio...Linda, very sad, not to be able to find any emotion for a loved one at their passing. I want to find out more of mother & son relationship.<br />Love the progression of the scene. And, who is that man???Cynthia Schuerrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03975914802967433794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-78293990343926139112010-01-02T08:13:37.652-05:002010-01-02T08:13:37.652-05:00Linda, this was as bleak as they come. I thought t...Linda, this was as bleak as they come. I thought the effect of the antipsychotics in preventing the pain of grief was a nice touch. However, the sound of the clods hitting the casket was the sharpest image for me.<br /><br />This is some good writing here.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-34670413764456552862010-01-02T00:46:30.491-05:002010-01-02T00:46:30.491-05:00Wonderful, Wonderful. (Buy you already knew I thou...Wonderful, Wonderful. (Buy you already knew I thought that). You are one of my writing heroes. I so admire your work, girl.Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-72788068889839401922010-01-01T23:34:33.895-05:002010-01-01T23:34:33.895-05:00Very beautiful, Linda - your attention to detail w...Very beautiful, Linda - your attention to detail with quirky insights is lovely. I look forward to reading more!PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-71449717682992446512010-01-01T23:34:16.610-05:002010-01-01T23:34:16.610-05:00Loving it as always!
I have a suspicion about who...Loving it as always!<br /><br />I have a suspicion about who this man might be...<br /><br />So glad to be reading PURE :) Keep it coming.<br /><br />CChryshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08888604641107836723noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-21532336767674315232010-01-01T22:20:04.926-05:002010-01-01T22:20:04.926-05:00So wonderful to be reading your elegant prose agai...So wonderful to be reading your elegant prose again! Happy New Year and happy writing, Linda! ~LianeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-14159810898733093362010-01-01T22:16:40.956-05:002010-01-01T22:16:40.956-05:00Very engaging. I want to know more about the mic...Very engaging. I want to know more about the mice (though I haven't back-tracked yet to the other flashes... are the mice in those?).<br /><br />You put the reader at the gravesite. Great sensory details.peggyhttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-67256614811677804382010-01-01T19:48:47.253-05:002010-01-01T19:48:47.253-05:00Your prose is very poetic, Linda. I love your use ...Your prose is very poetic, Linda. I love your use of language to describe emotion and your characters' inner voice, the empathy it creates is wonderful.Amyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01304850820653245569noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-27280709787608776592010-01-01T18:49:41.954-05:002010-01-01T18:49:41.954-05:00You really can describe atmosphere so it's pal...You really can describe atmosphere so it's palpable.<br /><br />While, in the novel the reader may find out about the mysterious stranger, I'm quite happy for him to remain mysterious in this piece. It adds to the atmosphere.<br /><br />And Ben's pain comes through his medicated state very well.<br /><br />And I love the "...our Mother’s more feral darkness...". It leaves me wanting to know more about this character and his family.<br /><br />Nicely done.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-14265148051249931922010-01-01T17:18:49.251-05:002010-01-01T17:18:49.251-05:00Sold! The words "the tedium associated with t...Sold! The words "the tedium associated with the business of dying." got me. This story held me to th every end. Then again I have a weird quirk for ghastly, yet realistic tales of life. <br /><br />FAVORITE.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-51266724117623144202010-01-01T16:08:32.051-05:002010-01-01T16:08:32.051-05:00Ooh, very nice! You can put me down for a copy of ...Ooh, very nice! You can put me down for a copy of your book too. :)Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00361651251233078437noreply@blogger.com