tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post1481856328874594888..comments2023-08-17T04:03:48.173-04:00Comments on leftbrainwrite: It’s True What They SayLindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-69539001108259884922011-01-13T15:55:46.386-05:002011-01-13T15:55:46.386-05:00So many styles of writing this week! Your stream o...So many styles of writing this week! Your stream of consciousness is very effective given your character's situation. I'd imagine being between life and death and knowing it would sound something like that in my head. Very different and very good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-74031996944478206812011-01-10T19:19:02.932-05:002011-01-10T19:19:02.932-05:00Owww! That last line was such a grabber.
Brillian...Owww! That last line was such a grabber.<br /><br />Brilliant descriptions as usual, Linda. I got such a sense of this character's life and death.<br /><br />JaiJai Joshihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858987106548357551noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-49562447578597215152011-01-10T10:00:11.230-05:002011-01-10T10:00:11.230-05:00Well done!
it doesn't hurt to believe in the ...Well done!<br /><br />it doesn't hurt to believe in the other side... Paigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04702664099837224184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-7017856461812941422011-01-09T01:35:53.700-05:002011-01-09T01:35:53.700-05:00So very gorgeous and indeed haunting, Linda...So very gorgeous and indeed haunting, Linda...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-46636771604716825142011-01-08T19:29:58.802-05:002011-01-08T19:29:58.802-05:00I agree, the stream of consciousness was perfect f...I agree, the stream of consciousness was perfect for this. Well done.~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-58637502933191514102011-01-08T19:11:14.726-05:002011-01-08T19:11:14.726-05:00Wow, intense. The stream of consciousness worked t...Wow, intense. The stream of consciousness worked to a T. It seemed hopeful, almost serene, until the thought of the child he would never see - that really tugs at the heart. Very nice, Linda.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-47140586479049527172011-01-08T17:10:03.916-05:002011-01-08T17:10:03.916-05:00Linda, I Love, Love, Love this! I'm a great be...Linda, I Love, Love, Love this! I'm a great believer of "the Other Side", and it's stories like this that comfort me in that belief. <br />Absolutely amazing how you told so much in so few words! <br /><br />Because you're such a master, I created something for you: http://wp.me/pxgHj-n1 <br />Thank you so very much for sharing your brilliant talent!Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-48292781861755045812011-01-08T11:19:58.931-05:002011-01-08T11:19:58.931-05:00This is an excellent story! Love the stream of con...This is an excellent story! Love the stream of consciousness of him trying to hang on to life. Too bad it doesn't look like he's going to make it...Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-7235238135691973652011-01-08T10:00:01.055-05:002011-01-08T10:00:01.055-05:00I, too, enjoyed the absense of periods. It was lik...I, too, enjoyed the absense of periods. It was like all of his thoughts running together as time and this world slipped away. Well done.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-54474099946278796232011-01-08T02:06:59.022-05:002011-01-08T02:06:59.022-05:00Gorgeous descriptions, even the blood in the snow ...Gorgeous descriptions, even the blood in the snow had a certain kind of beauty. Amazing story. This is wonderful.Rachel Blackbirdsonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02246966713076881105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-6914187011374720142011-01-07T22:18:20.408-05:002011-01-07T22:18:20.408-05:00Another brilliant flash, Linda. I love the lack of...Another brilliant flash, Linda. I love the lack of punctuation and formatting in this. It's a beautifully tragic story. Your words always hang with me after I read them and I know this piece will too.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-79075536632239258232011-01-07T22:10:56.975-05:002011-01-07T22:10:56.975-05:00"...then Pa grasps my fingers, odd because he..."...then Pa grasps my fingers, odd because he’s never held my hand and he’s dead ten years..."<br /><br />And right there everything in the story comes into focus - no matter how it is finally going to end.<br /><br />I loved the way this flowed...life pouring way.<br /><br />Really well done.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-14635577265613518182011-01-07T22:05:43.285-05:002011-01-07T22:05:43.285-05:00Life flashing before your eyes? Nice pacing and qu...Life flashing before your eyes? Nice pacing and quickness to show that feeling of hopelessness.julito77https://www.blogger.com/profile/08218802380208563118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-4542881076328822182011-01-07T11:10:19.666-05:002011-01-07T11:10:19.666-05:00AMAZING. AMAZING. AMAZING. A quick shot - I cou...AMAZING. AMAZING. AMAZING. A quick shot - I could hear the person talking... just brilliant writing here.<br /><br />Jim Bronyaur<br />http://jimbronyaur.com/?page_id=121 (#fridayflash)<br />www.twitter.com/jimbronyaurjim bronyaurhttp://www.jimbronyaur.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-14381804722943545972011-01-07T07:59:29.733-05:002011-01-07T07:59:29.733-05:00Maybe I'm just tired this morning and am unabl...Maybe I'm just tired this morning and am unable to come up with suitable comments (all true!) but I am blown away by your story and cannot find words that won't be trite. So please know I love this, for many reasons.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-48095543017181911852011-01-06T23:54:08.664-05:002011-01-06T23:54:08.664-05:00A lot of people care, Linda. So do you, or you wou...A lot of people care, Linda. So do you, or you wouldn't have written it. I care, and I liked it.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-15917831137439268242011-01-06T21:06:34.056-05:002011-01-06T21:06:34.056-05:00I love that you used stream of consciousness to wr...I love that you used stream of consciousness to write this because it captured that "life-flashes-before-your eyes" phenomenon that usually happens to us during tragic events. I found this piece oddly peaceful and reassuring. The father holding his hand, the feeling of being sweaty and happy, the knowledge that he's not alone on the other side. Very cool that you could capture that all in just a few words.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-55832866495348736732011-01-06T20:28:15.847-05:002011-01-06T20:28:15.847-05:00Heartbreaking imagery and thoughts - the kind you ...Heartbreaking imagery and thoughts - the kind you do so well, Linda.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-71806511791891061962011-01-06T19:21:20.552-05:002011-01-06T19:21:20.552-05:00"blood sinking the snow like maple sap" ..."blood sinking the snow like maple sap" - Love the imagery! (Hugs)IndigoSage Ravenwoodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17143502548162174269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7186877685534377957.post-91084216125531832092011-01-06T14:16:48.056-05:002011-01-06T14:16:48.056-05:00Hunting accidents are bad enough, but an archery a...Hunting accidents are bad enough, but an archery accident is harsh.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.com